A cursed existence – #flashfiction #amwriting

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers – hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

I usually write something original, but today I’m hijacking a few sentences from my current manuscript because they fit the picture. This story is about a curse.

‘Does it matter,’ he sighed, ‘because the reality is, I’ve not left this estate in over one hundred and fifty years.’

I shook my head in disbelief—why not simply walk out the gate? Flaws, there had to be flaws in his tale.

‘I only exist in corporeal form when the house is occupied by females—women, girls. The moment a man or boy steps through the gate, I disappear.’

‘To where?’ I scoffed.

‘I don’t know, but not here. Whenever you leave, so do I. When you return, I do. When the house is empty, that is what I become. I am a spirit somewhere’

20 comments

  1. Interesting premise

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    1. It began life as something very different before this one.

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  2. Now I’m really intrigued! I’d love to read more about your WIP.

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    1. I may share some more – I’m seeking representation at the moment.

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  3. Certainly wets the appetite for more.

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    1. Good I hope it does – I would love to get it published.

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  4. My initial thought was “What a wretched existence, always coming and going. He should just die and get it over with.”
    An interesting tale so far though it promises constant complications. 🙂

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    1. Yes, a wretched existence, even more so if he can’t die! So plenty of complications.

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  5. Very intriguing. I wonder what other rules constrain his existence.

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    1. There are other rules, and consequences too.

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  6. Gimme more of this – now! This really sent my brain spinning with ideas of my own – thanks 😀

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    1. Food for thought? I hope it gives you some good ideas.

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  7. Yes, intriguing indeed…

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    1. Thank you. It helped fuel this WIP.

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  8. As the others say, intriguing. Has wet the appetite. 😊

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    1. I’m glad you’re intrigued – I hoping to get this published.

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  9. gahlearner · · Reply

    I want to read more of this, too. Very intriguing. Go, get it published… 🙂

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  10. michael1148humphris · · Reply

    Interesting, there is a longer story here.

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  11. Great idea!

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  12. Amuseinked · · Reply

    Interesting. I wonder what happened to him and what he did to get cursed like this in the first place. Can’t wait to read more!

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